nice effort
It seems you mimicked the lead nicely, along with the melodys and basic structure of the song. What it doesn't have is a clear enough bass to drive the song. I personally think you had a bit too much clutter. I suggest start turning things down in your mix, mainly the hi hats. Balance the volume levels, perhaps sidechain if you have to... till you can clearly hear each individual instrument clearly.
I'm hearing an awful lot of mid to low range, and not much treble. Mainly because your bass is drowning your main melody out. To sum it all up, I would just suggest taking things out, compressing things, till its not so muddy.
You did a very good job on this remix. You had some nice transitions, and your bass sounded pretty tight when it had its solo. Your percussion was good, however your kick was louder then your snare, and your open hi hat was a bit loud too.
Just writing what I noticed upon listening, hope some of it was helpful, and congrats on a job well done.